Occupy Moanalua

Team TEAL has been working on a project entitled Occupy Moanalua, which is aimed at the everyday heavy backup of traffic in the student parking lot at Moanalua High School. This is a flyer advertising the movement, and the goal is to have all student driver (and even teachers if possible) come out and protest in the front sidewalk of the parking lot to show the administration that there is blocks in the parking lot and they need to be fixed. One of the main problems is the crossing walk, which has nobody overseeing it so students sometimes cross carelessly, and continuously with no respect for drivers. We want to enforce someone whether it be students or an extra administration officer to simply act as a crossing guard for the students crossing and the cars in order to prevent that backup and allow more safety.

Tribute Poster

Shades of Gray

This project made me reevaluate a lot of the activities I previously had going on in my life. Although some of the list is made up (I haven't stolen anything, be to jail or been close to going to jail, or committing a serious crime such as murder), it does show me I have made some impulsive and reckless decisions and participated in such activities, and that isn't good for me. As the stages of development from the childlike phase of doing without thinking to growing into a matured adult and letting both society and what you personally know to be wrong and right were taught to me, I realize that I'm past the stage where I'm supposed to be. Now, this list doesn't include all the good I've done in the world to, so by looking at this, judgement may arise, and the word careless may been thrown out to describe me. I assure that I am not, and although I have been influenced to make choices in the past that were not the best, I think I'm progressively moving towards things that are more beneficial to me personally and to making better choices as a person.

Final Allusion Poem

She was 10. 

and already knew greater things were in store. 

People looked at her a bit differently. 

Like she was a bit strange, a bit flighty, a bit troubled. 

And she was. 

But that didn't falter her. 

With such a small frame

you wouldn't immediately see the huge ambition in that girl. 

Unless you looked into her big brown eyes

filled with fire and excitement. 

It was common to hear her speak her mind, 

regardless if her opinions were differing from those

of her peers. 

She made her first get away 

into the world of euphoria and exhilaration

and from there she was hooked on that feeling. 

She was flying. 

She was free. 

Her adventures got more frightening 

as they got closer to the stars. 

More things were being put at risk. 

 

Now it was time for the most monumental one. 

Warnings and cautionary tales 

were told to her 

about the dangers of the trip she was about to pursue 

for the destination in her mind 

was one so small and seeming

unattainable. 

They thought she was crazy 

attempting to do 

what just "cannot be done."  

They asked if she was wiling to take the chance 

and she nodded with confidence.

That's when she got into the plane and took off. 

Previous memories were replaced with visions of her future. 

She was making her great escape 

and she never looked back. 

Allusion Poster Draft

Allusion Poem Draft

She was 10. 

and already knew greater things were in store. 

People looked at her a bit differently. 

Like she was a bit strange, a bit flighty, a bit troubled. 

And she was. 

But that didn't falter her. 

She made her first get away 

into the world of euphoria and exhilaration

and from there she was hooked on that feeling. 

She was flying. 

She was free. 

Her adventures got more frightening 

as they got closer to the stars. 

Now it was time for the most monumental one. 

Warnings and cautionary tales 

were told to her 

about the dangers of the trip she was about to pursue 

for the destination in her mind 

was one so small and seeming

unattainable. 

They asked if she was wiling to take the chance 

and she nodded with confidence.

That's when she got into the plane and took off. 

Previous memories were replaced with visions of her future. 

She was making her great escape 

and she never looked back. 

Parent Conference: 1st Semester Portfolio

Hi Mom and Dad, 

This past semester, I do feel as if I've done some writing pieces to my liking. Those are the one's in which I'm the most proud of, the one's I've spent a lot of effort and revision on. The personal essays I've written, such as the Coming of Age and the College Personal Statement ones were the pieces I'm the most pleased with. Using the voice trait especially, I feel like doing these personal essays has really helped me figure out more of who I am and who I want to be. Those were created with more than words. They were written with nostalgia and emotion and ambition for a better future, too. 

The major challenges for me during this semester had to be research reports, such as the Risky Business one. As I talked about earlier, personal essays are my strong point. When it comes to non-fiction, though, I tend to have a harder time putting words together that are profession, factual, and still interesting to read. 

Next quarter, I do plan on bettering my non-fiction writing through more essays, and applying that into other classes, too, such as the Exploravision project we're currently doing for Physics. My goals are to become better at research and at phrasing information in a way that the readers would be pleased to look through

View my portfolio at dancergrrl16.wix.com/writingstandards 

After viewing, please comment with answers to the following questions: 

1. What piece of writing did you like best in my portfolio and why?
2. What did you like about my portfolio and sharing and what would you like to see me improve on?
3. Which of the writing traits (ideas, organization, voice, word choice) do you feel was most successful for me?
4. Which of the traits of writing would you like me to improve on in the coming semester?

Thanks!